Dialogue - how much is too much?

by Clare Williams
30th November 2016

Hi everyone. Me again! While working through the list of recommended reads so helpfully provided by some of you, I've decided to start a new ms too (when inspiration strikes and all that!). It's in the first person but I've noticed there's a lot of dialogue in it. Does anyone have any thoughts on dialogue and how much is too much. It reads ok to me, for now.

Thanks in advance :)

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I have to agree with Jimmy. Every type of dialogue has it's place. The story I'm currently working on has a long waffly speech of no importance merely to emphasize that the main character is not listening. And I just love colloquial ums and ers and thingies. Try reading 'riddley walker' by Russel Hoban.

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Adrian, how do you show that a character is long-winded by the way they DRESS???

If - in a novel - a long-winded character only speaks concisely, to the point (the point of the novel, say), and interestingly... then the novelist has failed miserably.

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Jimmy Hollis i Dickson
03/12/2016

I agree with Lorraine.

An author should use only, 'he said', 'she said', in brief, two person conversations. Where it is obvious who is speaking there is no need for a reporting clause.

The use of, 'he said laughinlgy', 'she said decisively', are poor prose style. As descriptive narratives - they are epic fails.

Descriptive narratives as reporting clauses are rarely seen in contemporary novels. Better examples are, 'chuckled John' - 'We must act now,' she said.

Jimmy, if I wanted to describe a boring character, I would 'SHOW' it by the way they are dressed, their actions and mannerisms - not with long-winded speech.

Though, I personally, would avoid boring, uninteresting and nice characters.

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