"Daddy is going to be away all this week”
“Daddy is going to be a whale this week?”
“Yes, Daddy is going to be away all this week”
Daddy’s going to be a whale this week
Daddy is going to be a whale
With a whale’s fins and eyes and mouth
And a great big whale’s tail
I wonder how he'll grow that large
How much he’ll need to eat?
And do you think it will be strange at first
To have no legs or feet?
I’ll watch him plunge into the water
I can't even guess how deep
And then when it gets to nighttime
I'll imagine him asleep
I’m sure there is a lot of food
In all the deep blue sea
But it must be hard to boil a kettle for
His usual cup of tea
I hope that he will find new friends
He’ll meet sharks and rays and eels
He might even find a shipwreck to play
Hide and seek with seals
Daddy's going to be a whale this week
Daddy's going to be a whale
And he's promised that the week after next
I can be a snail
Thanks for your comments, Steve. They are really helpful.
This is a great idea and nicely done! It has lovely rhythm and a really nice rhyming style.
Have a look at where you do and don't use contractions. For example the last verse should mirror the second, with 'Daddy's' then 'Daddy is'. The rest just play with them so they fit the meter of the piece.
It does feel a bit difficult to get my mouth around at times but I think this is an accent thing (for example, as a northeasterner I say 'aal' rather than 'awl' so the pun didn't work until I thought about it!). Read it out loud, and maybe get shine friends to do it as well, and make up your own mind... Probably just me...
Cheers, Steve