How Ellie-Mabel Came Unstuck

by Lauren Beasley
15th January 2016

This is the story Ellie-Mabel

Who licked the gum under the table

(As I’m sure you’re all aware

Naughty children stick gum there)

At first it was just a game

To amuse her until playtime came

But then one day disaster struck

Ellie-Mabel’s tongue got stuck

Onto the gum so white and sticky

(Serves her right for being icky)

So there she lay under the table

Till the teacher said “Where’s Ellie-Mabel?”

“HELPTH BY TONGK ITH THUCKK!”

Cried the unfortunate little schmuck

The teacher looked all around

To find out who had made the sound

She searched the classroom, edge to edge

Even upon the window ledge

She rummaged under flower pots

And other such unlikely spots

Then finally looked under the table

Where she found Ellie-Mabel

Dangling in mid air

As her tongue held her there

“EEEK” the mistress let out a screech

“How am I supposed to teach

A child such as Ellie-Mabel

Who sticks herself under the table?”

Her wild classmates were delighted

To see their poor teacher blighted

They banged on desks and jumped on chairs

Thrilled by the entirely awful affair

(Ellie-Mabel would have joined in too

But gum makes an exceptional glue)

“We’ll cut her down” teacher declared

Ellie-Mabel started to get scared

“Blood will splatter and guts may fly

But she needs to learn to multiply

And for that she needs to be able

To complete her sums upon the table

And not by dangling underneath

Or gnawing at gum with her teeth

In all of my years as a teacher

I’ve never met such a wayward creature

And who has raised this little dolt?

It must be all the parents’ fault”

The teacher marched towards the door

Off in search of a large-ish saw

While she was gone the classmates pulled

Upon the poor little fool

They grabbed her legs and made a line

The one in front then gave a sign

The children hauled with all their strength

Stretching her tongue to an enormous length

Until at last Miss Ellie-Mabel

Was freed from the gum under the table

Moments later the teacher returned

And what is that lesson that has been learned?

Never lick the gum under the table

Or you’ll end up just like Ellie-Mabel

Who is a bit more cautious than before

Now that her tongue drags on the floor

Comments

Thanks for all your help, Jimmy. I appreciate it and I'll keep it in mind for future poems. You're right about the scanning, definitely an area I need to improve in!

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Lauren Beasley
29/10/2016

"Here's the tale of Ellie-Mabel"

This would allow you to add a sub-title: "An Ellie-Mabel Table Tale".

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02/09/2016

ONE example:

This is the story Ellie-Mabel [considering the rhythm you later swing into, this is already too long... and it's missing an "of", which would make it even longer]

Who licked the gum under the table [2 syllables too long, in my opinion]

SUGGESTION:

Here's the tale of Ellie-Mabel

Who licked gum from under tables

This slightly damages your perfect rhyme of Mabel and table (SINGULAR) and you might find a better solution. But the scanning seems - to me - worth that small sacrifice.

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