I Don't Care To be Frank.

by Mark Corbluth
26th November 2013

Christine Turner, attractive wife of wealthy unscrupulous business man Paul Turner and daughter of the distinguished maverick Earl Des Poitiers has been kidnapped in the East of England.

A ransom demand is left at the Earls mansion for £ 5 million pounds. It appears to come from a UK branch of Al Qaida. One of Paul Turner’s businesses, S & T Security based in Iraq, exacerbate the dangerous situation as they are accused of torturing workers in Bagdad. Then an extremely violent psychopath, local villain, Joe White is implicated in the kidnapping. It looks bleak for Christine Turner who has entered her private hell.

Ex SAS and police inspector Frank Spring, now a private investigator, is called in by Paul Turner to find his wife. Cynical tough Frank joins the frenetic race against time to save Christine. His beautiful P.A. Betty Brown assists in this increasingly violent and deadly game. Will Chief Inspector Bill Wyatt get to the kidnappers before Frank? The Earl sells his prize possession to get the ransom demand, a world famous painting of Venice by Raphael.

The outcome seems to be heading for disaster as the Earl arranges to meet the kidnappers to hand over the money in exchange for Christine in the wilds of Suffolk at midnight in a wintery landscape.

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What a rip off..paying to have some poxy agent answer your question..stuff you lot..as bad as the Tories. Twits.

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Mark,

Why not post the opening chapter here and then those who like it, can download from Amazon.

You might get some sales and or feedback to help you.

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Some feedback on your blurb.

Joe White: presumably a pseudonym?

Would a UK bank branch of Al Queda be functioning? A ransom note, or phone call would be a more credible way to request ransom.

While it is clear that torturing workers in Baghdad would make the situation more serious, the line in your blurb doesn't flow-soemthing like: negotiations with the hostage taking group are stalled with an ill-fated press release that Paul Turner's company has tortured workers...and so on.

'Cynical tough Frank joins the frenetic race against time to save Christine. His beautiful P.A. Betty Brown assists in this increasingly violent and deadly game. ' perhaps can be condensed to a single sentence without a description of Frank, but that Frank, assisted by his own Moneypenny are hired to negotiate. The name Betty Brown, like Joe White also makes me wonder how tongue-in the cheek you are intentionally being.

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