This is another extact from a larger story. It is completely maybe up from my own experiances, and I would really appreacate any feedback.
Which, witch, which
One has a T and One without, simple.
But which which does the T belong to? How do you remember to replace it with the H? And then move the T along one letter? Which which is the right which?
I sit in a yellow room four hours every week. The square windows are tinted with twilight, and a round wooden desk is stationed in front of me. Two cards both say which, both spell which, both sound like which; but both have different meanings, different spellings. So which which is the right which?
‘A witch, as in a wicked witch, is spelt like this’ he touches the card to his right. David, not Sir or MR but David, he’s a teacher, my teacher, but he doesn’t shout or get frustrated, he’s kind and understanding. Comparing my work to my previous work and not to others.
I look at the card hidden slightly by his fingertips; witch, the one with the T. Before I try to explain yet again that it’s not that easy to remember, he slides the paper towards him fishing a pen from his trouser pocket.
‘This is how I remember them.’ He tilts his head to the side looking for a new angle and awkwardly bends his arm around the paper trying not to block my view. I watch him draw a smooth line across the t and then join them up at the top forming a soft spike.
And it clicks
‘The top of the t is a witch’s hat, which a wicked witch would wear.’ I stare at the paper, grinning like an idiot. I’ve seen this drawing before but never understood it. Never actually saw it being drawn out in front of me, just the finished result.
The t in witch is a hat, a wicked witch’s hat. The o’s in look are eyes, you look at something with your eyes. The i in their is a person, it’s their toy.
Countless teachers have shown me these drawings some more patient than others but in the end they gave up. But David didn’t, he took his time and explained with pictures, drawing each line in front of me. Just a simple drawing just a simple idea and a patient teacher.
I feel enlightened reading this. I did struggle a little as suffer from dyspraxia which is on the autistic scale.
Punctuation-wise, it might be clearer to write -
But which "which" does the T belong to? How do you remember to replace it with the "H"? And then move the "T" along one letter? Which "which" is the right which?
However, I'm no professional so might be best to show your work to someone you trust who can give you honest and constructive feedback. It could just be my Dyspraxia causing me to struggle.
I love the descriptions you have used, especially the witch's hat etc. I didn't understand "The i in their is a person, it’s their toy." (Possibly my Dyspraxia again).
What you have written draws the reader in and you can tell it comes from the heart.