A-list to be?

by Annie Faux-Pas
29th October 2016

There's a girl in heels

Higher than my knees

And some guy in a visor

Can't stop looking in the miror.

 

Did you get her good side?

Could you move her to the right?

 

Got no urge

Got no calling

Repertoire is slowly falling.

 

Welcome to...

Where pain is pretty

Welcome to...

Where they never fail to diss you.

 

You're on the guest list

Do you wanna try this?

You're really gonna make it

If the shoe fits.

 

Gotta suck your cheeks in

Stick your chest out

Clench your ass tight

Or get the hell out!

 

Welcome to...

Where people nod instead of dance

Welcome to...

The reak of desperation for a chance.

Welcome to...

Think you've nearly made it,

Worry,worry, worry to sustain it

Did they get your good side?

Or were they aiming

To the right?

Comments

Thanks Pablo. Yes, it was, good observation.

It feels natural to me to not adhere to strict timings, just to go with the flow (even it's a bit erratic).

Take care

Vicky

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Quite a good rhythm to this and I like the intermittent nature of the rhyming.

Was this originally intended as a performance piece? If not I think you should try it as such.

Cheers,

Pablo.

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