Lou and the Sky Sparkles

This is my first publication please let me know what you think, it is a young Children's fiction fairy tale adventure book giving the kids time to exploit their imagination have fun reading this book.

At the foot of the castle we stood looking up, looking at the drawbridge we saw it was down, ‘mellows andgumballs’ were marching into the castle military style.  After a short time the drawbridge which was made of waffles was going back up to close shut before that more troops marched across into the castle there were popsicles, gumballs, mellows, fruit sticks and wine gums.

“Are you strangers of our land?”  We heard coming from a flossy flower below us.

“I am Lou, and this is Willow.”  I told the candyfloss flower.

“This is Queen Angelina’s castle; beyond the bridge you will find Lollipop Land any strangers we meet either wants to go to the castle orLollipop land.  We have many surprises lovely and sweet for all our travellers to love and eat.  To pass the bridge you must feed the ‘lo’ that’s really what we call the big scary Gruffalo.”  Flossy flower said.

“Gruffalo!” Willow replied.

We headed on climbing through the entire honeycomb patch and reachingthe bridge in sight.  Willow sat down on the ‘ginger cake’ I sat amongst the liquorice, opening the book I read on up to meeting the Gruffalo. 

“Do you think the Shadow Stones are here Lou?”

“I don’t know, the book is taking us tooLollipop Land.”

“Bye, corndogs!” Willow frowned as he looked at the Gruffalo and looked at his corndogs.

“Strangers by my bridge, want to cross, I do not let strangers cross my bridge.”Said a stern big sour breathe Gruffalo.

“Mr Gruffalo, we have for you.” Willow stretched his arm out to hand him the corndog and soda pop.

“What do you seek in Lollipop Land?”

“The whereabouts of the Four Shadow Stones” I said.

“I know not of this,” he grabbed the dog and pop, “I will let you through to cross my bridge find the purple lollipops and they will guide you.”

Clutching the book we crossed the Gruffalo bridge, this bridge was weird as it was spongy, colourful and made out of jelly beans. On the other side of the bridge we found Lollipop Land.  Around the land we could seescurrying and busy little creatureseverywhere. Don’t know what they were but they moved very fast.  Continuing on the path that led from the bridge, there were hypes of movement around us, which we could hear but could not see.  Willow thought he was in heaven as all he could see was lollipops, brightly coloured juicilicious lollipops he reached out to pick one for himself a bright orange one.

“Willow remember we must find the purple lollipops, you greedy gobbly gannet,” I told him.