My fish pond, August 29th 2016

by Penny Gadd
12th September 2016

The koi, red, black, white, metallic gold, slip through the water,

Their paths traced by slow ripples that roll across the pond

Making a panelled lattice of silver, through which the fish

Slide, now visible, now unseen,

Hide, by light, by movement.

A reflected vine, with leaves hard-edged against

The black and silver water, seems more solid than the vine

Emerging from the same root in the bank

To climb towards the sun. 

The moment of reality shimmers.

Red, black, white, metallic gold, appear - and vanish.

© Penny Gadd 12/09/2016

Comments

I like this. Peaceful, relaxing.

Only one niggle (a rather pedantic one): If you say "A reflected vine", that literally means a physical vine that is being reflected, when you obviously are writing about the reflection of the vine. "A reflected image of a vine" would be too clumsy, and everybody knows what you mean, so you might decide to leave it as it is.

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