Part 1:The First Touch.
As Darkness was coming closer and closer
You were smiling like a kid
And because you were lunatic
That very moment when she touched You
-with her gentle hands,covered with black velvet gloves
You felt important
even if it was for the worst
…someone had noticed You
And You were not afraid of her
The big bright eyes tricked you
like Eric did back to 1900
And then her smile
and that moment you started wondering
what if she was Beauty(?)
or just Darkness wearing her ironic mask
You could not resist and asked her,hoping to get the answer you wanted
but not..
“You fool!i am glad
glad to find you at last
searching for thousand years,
sucking thousand souls,
just to find the one that would satisfy me the most!”
Her eyes were staring at you now,down on your knees
begging for mercy..
She started laughing..
Part 2:The Confession.
After the sun went down,four Dark Passengers took You to her Kingdom,tied you with chains and waiting for their Mistress.And then she came,wearing a black dress,with so many sparkles,each one representing the pure souls she stole.
She asked you for a last wish
You hesitated
Then obeyed you
You had a wish
but..you were besotted with her
and you kept your mouth shut again
She was mad
She was desperate to hear your wish
That time her order came along with a pungent scream
“I wish I was yours
even if it was only till the Dusk” you said
“Not with the soul you carry” she answered
“Then help me,I could do anything!”
“Your soul is dark,is confused,is d..”
“Then help me!It is my wish and you must do it!
A drop of tears showed up from her eyes.Tears that no human being could ever imagine that would come from Darkness.Was it tears of joy,listening You were ready to change for her,or tears of sadness,because She was not able to have you(?)You were a mortal,and She was the evil being in the universe.”But he has a soul,a soul I was searching for years” she thought.”Maybe there is a reason for that,maybe there is a reason for everything..”
Part 3:The Great Feeling.
Darkness was ready
You were ready
Both of you so calm
for the first time in your lifes
Finally the sword came out
Darkness and Redemption together again
Redemption was so bright like her eyes
Oh her eyes-her eyes!
Any man could die in front of them
You were terrified when you saw the sword.Desperation,Dissapointment and Fear came to your mind.“So that was it?” you asked-“Trust me” Darkness said,and full of confidence raised Redemption and stuck it in your chest.
And you screamed
And after that you smiled
A perfect smile
This time you knew it
It was for your own good
The blade ripped out your soul
It was sharp
It was cold
It was adept
Part 4:The Rebirth.
You saw unique things happening right in front of your eyes.Things you had never imagined.Things you will never see again.
Your Nightmares were disappeared
Your sins were forgiven
Mistakes of the past were erased
Lies became truths
And you cried
And the tears were definitely tears of joy
You were reborn
This time stronger
with more courage
with more power
with more will
You woke up
You saw that smile again
more real and true than the last time
together with a feeling of satisfaction
She knew she did the right thing
Then she gave you the sword
“Do the same to me now…
and i am yours...
Forever…”
I read this because I am half-Greek / half English, now living in Greece and you obviously have a Greek name.
I liked this. I liked the style and the images. It's something between a poem, a pre-Raphaelite painting and a fantasy story. I'm not sure I understood it all but I think I got the gist. I'm not sure about the title, or why 'You' is sometimes capitalised and sometimes not. Or 'D' - is that Darkness? I think I would like a bit more clarification about what's going on.
Notes - Punctuation: remember to leave a space after commas, full stops, etc.
Good work.