I would like your opinions on the blurb I've written.
Heidi Cole lived a quiet life in the
middle of Ivy Forest with her
grandmother, until the shape-shifting
Prince Ibis crash landed near her home.
After saving his life, the two set out to
help Ibis escape a band of sky pirates
know as Crimson Skies, lead by the
malevolent Captain Shani.
Thank you Lorraine, I have taken your advice and added more onto it. Once I have typed it up, I will post it so yourself and others can point out how it can be even better.
Excellent advice, Lorraine.
Hi Antoinette,
First thing to note is that the blurb for a work of fiction is always written in the present tense.
Secondly, this is very short, and I have no idea what the book's about. I know it's some sort of fantasy, but where is it set? Is Ivy Forest on Earth? Where does the Prince come from? Who are the sky pirates?
Apart from being chased by Captain Shani, what's Ibis's goal? Is there a quest, or a reason he is being chased, or for him fleeing?
The past tense of lead is led.
There is nothing here that makes me think the novel is any different from a thousand others. Your blurb is your shop window; it's part of the cover, the first thing I will see, and it has to work really hard considering that, in a very small space and a few lines, it has to grab my attention completely.
Study the blurbs on the backs of your favourite books, paper or e-version; count the number of words, and see if you can work out what it is that the writer does that so draws you in.
Hope this helps.
Lorraine