Would anyone be so good as to read my short story on the Penny Shorts website, and leave a review (good, bad, or indifferent). I would be very grateful as it is worth a read and is quite short. The url is https://www.pennyshorts.com/stories/historical/from-the-school-house-window/
Thanks to anyone who has the time and inclination.
Thank you Clare and Kevin, pleased you both enjoyed it and made the time to read and leave feedback. It's been on there for over a year and I've discovered that the only thing more frustrating than constant rejections is seeing your work accepted but not knowing if anyone is reading it. Kevin, your comments on grammar are noted, thanks, Clare, I have since discovered that to leave feedback on the penny shorts site you have to part with cash so thank you for posting your feedback in this forum.
I there, I have read your story and I enjoyed it very much. There are some particularly nice descriptive elements ('fairy light from the moon. Not golden, not wholesome, but a silver light that was tarnished') (Only the thickness of the pane of glass separated them.)
The twist in the story at the end is a very nice surprise too.
I would concentrate on the grammar, especially in the first half of the story, e.g. 're trace her steps' should be 're-trace her steps'. 'She appeared to wearing a bonnet' should be 'she appeared to be wearing a bonnet'.
It was a very satisfying read. Good luck with your writing.
Kevin.
Hi John I read your story and really enjoyed it, very chilling! But I couldn't leave a review. I couldn't create an account to leave one for some reason?? Maybe because I'm on my iPhone?
Thankyou for introducing me to penny shorts too, I've never heard of it before. Lots of great short stories on there!
Clare