An extract from my book

Hello I completed my first book last year December I have posted a snippet from the 33rd chapter bellow let me know what you think.

A
 chill
 ran
 down
 my
 spine
 as


Tracy
 pushed
 and 
drove
 the
 huge


doors
 inward.
 A
 gust
 of
 cold 
wind


flew
 out
 and
 we
 walked
 into
 the


stale
 cold
 jail
 it
 was 
as
 if
 I
 could


hear
 the
 echoes
 the
 screams
 of


people
 trapped
 in
 this 
den 
years


gone
 I
 didn’t
 like
 it
 here 
not
 one


bit
. Rows
 and 
rows
 of
 cells
 littered


the
 place 
their
 bars
 running 
down


like
 hot
 chocolate
 down
 the 
side
 of


a
 mug, 
I
 could
 just
 imagine
 thin


raked
 men
 clinging 
to
 their
 cages


wailing…


Tracy
 just
 stood
 there
 oblivious
 to


the
 fact
 that
 we
 found
 our selves
 in


a
 giant 
bird cage
 the
 spirits
 of 
long


dead
 criminals
 crying
 out. 
I


examined
 the
 place
 nervously


noticing 
a
 sheet
 white
 bone 
lying
 in
 one
 of
the
 cells.
 I
 jumped 
back.


What 
was
 Tracy
 waiting
 for
 lets


just
 get 
out
 of 
here, 
that’s 
when
 I


noticed
 it
. Each
 cell
 contained
 a


little 
boy
 crouched
 in
 the
 gloom.


Rascals 
disturbing
 the
 peace
 like


little
 ogres 
crouching
 under
 their


bridges 
waiting
 to 
pounce
 on
 you


and
 suck
 the 
marrow 
out 
of
 your


bones, 
they
 began
 to
 click 
their


fingers
 and
 tap
 their
 feet.