Hello I completed my first book last year December I have posted a snippet from the 33rd chapter bellow let me know what you think.
A chill ran down my spine as
Tracy pushed and drove the huge
doors inward. A gust of cold wind
flew out and we walked into the
stale cold jail it was as if I could
hear the echoes the screams of
people trapped in this den years
gone I didn’t like it here not one
bit . Rows and rows of cells littered
the place their bars running down
like hot chocolate down the side of
a mug, I could just imagine thin
raked men clinging to their cages
wailing…
Tracy just stood there oblivious to
the fact that we found our selves in
a giant bird cage the spirits of long
dead criminals crying out. I
examined the place nervously
noticing a sheet white bone lying in one of the cells. I jumped back.
What was Tracy waiting for lets
just get out of here, that’s when I
noticed it . Each cell contained a
little boy crouched in the gloom.
Rascals disturbing the peace like
little ogres crouching under their
bridges waiting to pounce on you
and suck the marrow out of your
bones, they began to click their
fingers and tap their feet.
thank you also, well... I am still working on it at the moment, that part is only a very small example of the prologue. but Marcus is joining up with some very interesting characters of many back stories. but I will post that online later
Let me know via message if you upload any more of this story, or if it is published. I would buy this
Thank you I enjoyed your prolouge to, it was very spontaneous I'd like to know what happens to Marcus(:
I like this, I am interested to know what is going to happen, and why their are children locked In this cage structure. a good piece writing.