Feedback please?

by Clare Williams
18th November 2016

Hi everyone

I have posted my prologue and part of my first chapter in shared works and was hoping for some feedback as I've changed it quite a bit by removing a lot of the backstory. I've also added a prologue which casts some doubt on the protagonist. I'm not sure if it works, and whether I've made it worse rather than improving it - think I need to take a step back for a while! Anyways - any feedback would be much appreciated. I'm happy to have a look at anything of yours in return.

Thanks in advance

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Actually, it IS Jummy... You've discovered my secret identity!

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Jimmy! Not Jummy :)

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Clare Williams
19/11/2016

Thanks Jummy. Both my before and after are on my shared works.

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