Feedback on shared work?

by Clare Williams
24th June 2017

Hi everyone.

I've posted the first 2 chapters of my new MS on shared works if anyone has the time or the inclination to take a look. I've posted the first chapter before but have changed it now, in particular from 1st to 3rd person POV. Would appreciate anyone's feedback/ comments.

It's a thriller and it's approx 1500 words.

Many thanks in advance.

Clare

Replies

Hi Clare! How are you?

Are you looking for a general comment on this piece or a full read and peer review? I've left you a comment.

Thanks :)

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