Many thanks indeed for posting the sample of your writing for us to enjoy. I've read it a couple of times. To help me make relevant comments can you let me know what you are hoping to achieve with your story? What sort of readers are you trying to attract, and what is it about the story- and about the way you have written it- that you hope will attract them?
Hi Ian,
Many thanks indeed for posting the sample of your writing for us to enjoy. I've read it a couple of times. To help me make relevant comments can you let me know what you are hoping to achieve with your story? What sort of readers are you trying to attract, and what is it about the story- and about the way you have written it- that you hope will attract them?
Best wishes
Denis