My first work.

by Adam Turner
18th March 2012

I am concerned that some parts of my story don't flow as well as others. I don't really know how to manage time and to show time passing in a story. Any help? The start of my story is in my 'shared work'.

Thanks

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I've read it. It is very painstakingly and densely written. Paragraph breaks might help readers to get 'into' it more easily. Shorter, more staccato sentences where you want to create the illusion of speed and urgency? Longer, multi clause sentences, to go meandering, have a breather, take your foot off the gas. :)

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Katie-Ellen Hazeldine
19/03/2012

Writing is a continuous evolving. Each word you type is learning. Everyday you improve your writing - you only get better and better. Make it become your routine... but don't forget to dare and modify every day.

About your problem... don't feel like a leprous, Adam. Make time pass is the most hard hability you can reach as a writer (in my opinion). But, learn how to make time pass, is something just TIME in itself will let you do through daily writing. Funny, isn't it? But also true. I guess the unique tip I can give you by now is... keep writing!

Good luck, Adam.

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T. O. Bührer
19/03/2012

I like the way you say you are off to read his work. Dont forget to describe the journey :p it is good practice. ;) x

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