One short story, two beginnings...

by Mehdi Kasbel
8th September 2013

Hi everybody

I am writing a short-story (horror, mystery) for one week now, I've finished it yesterday

But... I still have a problem, because I've tried two different beginnings

The first one is basic, you can't say nothing special about it, but fits well to the story (a kind of "I have a strange story to tell you")

The second one starts with a quote from a filmmaker, is more original, with some wit (since I'm quoting Woody Allen)

So, do you think it is right to begin a strange story by quoting a person who's more known for his humor, and which universe is diametrically opposite to this kind of story ?

Conformism or originality ?

Replies

The first one is not really clear, but it won't be a problem if I choose it, it goes like :" I hate weddings. I never attended any ceremony... etc"

The second one is :" A greta filmmaker said once :"I am not afraid of death, I just don't want to be there when it happens.". I was not afraid of my wedding... etc.

After that the ceremony becomes strange and macabre, in a Poe-like way !

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Mehdi Kasbel
09/09/2013

Are you able to share the two different beginnings with us? As then it maybe easier for us to comment on which one sounds the best.

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Catherine Quinn
08/09/2013

Are you able to share the two different beginnings with us? As then it maybe easier for us to comment on which one sounds the best.

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