Short story

by susan Russell
15th April 2014

I've posted a short story below & would love feedback. Does it seem complete or should it be expanded? Do you have an understanding of who/what Bert is? Does it make sense? Anything you can comment on would be appreciated.

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Nice story susan

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Neeraj V Murali
15/04/2014

Hi Susan,

I read your story yesterday and I think it's great. The only reason I haven't commented is that I haven't had time! Today's a bit manic too (deadline), but I hope to log in tomorrow, so please don't delete it yet!

Best,

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