I wrote a short story and the main comment is that I need to tighten up the narrative. I do tend to repeat character's names too often, which I've altered but I'm not sure where else to go for my second draft. It's about a man looking back on his life so I deliberately didn't write any speech into it to make it seem more like him looking back at memories; no one remembers whole conversations but you'll remember what happened.
Does anyone has any tips on tightening up a story that's purely descriptive, or should I bite the bullet and add speech?
I don't think I have read anything that ispurely descriptive. How long is it? Have you put a sample on here? It would be easier to tell if it worked or not?