I wrote a short story and the main comment is that I need to tighten up the narrative. I do tend to repeat character's names too often, which I've altered but I'm not sure where else to go for my second draft. It's about a man looking back on his life so I deliberately didn't write any speech into it to make it seem more like him looking back at memories; no one remembers whole conversations but you'll remember what happened.
Does anyone has any tips on tightening up a story that's purely descriptive, or should I bite the bullet and add speech?
Thanks Sarah, I've put up a comment to it.
Hi Charlene.
I've left another message under your piece after reading the new draft you posted.
Sarah :)
Maybe narrative would have been a better word than descriptive but there isn't one piece of dialogue in it. It's about 1800 words long and it's under writers' shared works, called A Life of Crime.