The court in the forest

by rena nakagawa
1st February 2012

Suddenly, I wake up feeling a dull headache.

Where am I?

I try to figure out what's going on around me, however, I can't make out shapes surrounding me, because my eyes are duzzed by greenish brightness as if I came out from underground to the meadow under the sun.

My ears are also dulled and can hear nothing but something like a noise made by a gaggle of many people.

What's happening to me?

I can't move my body----my arms, they are bound to the arms of the cold stone chair.

Now I see. I'm sitting on the chair,as for my body, is too bound to the back of it.

Have I been snatched?

This fear creeps from foot to head, almost bursts out of my mouth.

I wonder my mum is really worried about me.

Gradually, my eyes are accustomed to this brightness, I can see my situation very well now, after a few blinking.

'...settle down, settle down' croaks somebody in front of myself.

Next moment, I jerk my head up, then find myself catching narrow brown pupils belonging to a toad who has a round glasses, a white wig, and a long black cloak

I wonder I become crazy at last.

I tear my eyes from the toad's so that I can look side to side, up and down.

After a few seconds, I found my self sitting on the black stone seat in the middle of the audience(to my surprise,they are also toads and frogs), they are sitting round me in a circle on the platform. My arms are binded to the arms of the chair, so I can't scratch my nose tickling.

' you are...eh...what's your name, boy?'says the toad the very in front of me.

'Me? Leo,m-my name is Leo', I murmur at the corner of my mouth.

'Sorry?', he leans towards me and opens his tremendous wide mouth, so I shrink with fear of being eaten.

'L-Leo, sir'

'...and how old are you, a human boy?', he makes his body backwards then sinks himself in a hard leather chair comfortably.

'I'm six years old, I suppose'

'Do you know your guilt?' he says,as fumbling about something on the desk roughly.

Comments

I was intrigued by the title Rena. Though English is not your first language, I found your storyline intriguing also. There is no preamble as to how Leo got into this predicament. Depending on the age group you are aiming for - perhaps you might give a little more thought to what he might have been doing before? It does show promise though and certainly has its moments but needs a bit more work as mentioned in the comments above. Encouraging.

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Patricia Graham
17/10/2012

Thank you very match for reading my work and writing comment.

I'm Rena.

Yes, My first language is not English.

I think I need more practice of English,not only writing but also hearing, speaking.

So, I really appriciate your comments which pointed out my work's mistake.

It will help my learning English.

To tell the truth, I haven't been abroad in entire my life.

However, I love Engrish literature, and I think sooner or later the time will come when I need to command English precisely.

I'm studying life sciense in my university, so I need the ability to speech at an achademic meeting.

I'll try to improve my English, if you don't mind, please tell me my incorrect grammer or words, and expresions.

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rena nakagawa
25/01/2012

Hi Rena.

With a little polish and re-work, this could be a nice piece of writing.

Like Cathy (please accept my apologies if I'm wrong), I see that maybe, English is not your first language, which is apparent by the error of some of the words, and their context in a sentence.

However, don't let it put you off, keep going and practise, practise, practise!

Sarah :)

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