Dalia lives alone with her mother and her Aunty Ellis. There has been a lot of mishaps for this family and that is because of a curse. A curse is an expressed wish. It all began when her great grandmother was alive. She was terrified of being alone. She met a gypsy who gave her a gift, a black rose. The rose was said to give her good luck. And she remarried. However, the black rose was to be looked after well. And if failed, it would result badly. Eventually it resulted in death and she passed away. The black rose was then given to her grandmother. And since she died naturally, it was passed to Aunty Ellis. Aunty Ellis felt she couldn't cope with it so she gave it to her mother.
Goths weren't a big thing in the 70's, they were always around. And you can't say you "used to be Goth". You either are or you aren't. You might have only played the part briefly, to fit in. They have a world Goth day that was created on the 22nd of May in the UK. It wasn't worldwide until after.
Dalia's mother has kept secrets over the years and it isn't until her birthday that they are revealed.
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Not at all - I've read that some of us just want to share our work, simply because we just want to be out there. If we want criticalness we will ask questions, I've been doing that all the time. And okay fair enough but then don't say things like "i would prefer an extract" because then I think you might be wanting more and I'll share it to you
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Hi - I'm so sorry, I didn't mean to be hyper-critical although I do tend to speak my mind. Seriously though, people usually do use this site to ask for critiques so I couldn't see what you were looking for by posting these snippets. I haven't personally got the time to enter into personal exchanges to review your work, but if you put a post on 'questions' asking for that you might get someone who would like to exchange with you? We've all got things to learn and it's worth developing a thick skin as you go along, however difficult it feels at first. I used to find it horrendous putting anything I'd written 'out there' for critique, but it is worth it. I certainly didn't intend to put you off! Good luck & keep going.
Susan
I also want to say you come across as a tad critical of my work. If you're not happy with it, you're not happy with it, you don't need to point out all of the negatives. I'm still a new author, I'm young - I learn new things everyday and I am not going to let anything stop my dream. This is what I'm used to. But I don't let it get to me. Just thought I'd put it out there.
Kay