I never thought I'd see the day

by katherine swain
23rd October 2014

I wrote this poem for my son Adam who has just left home. Enjoy:)

I never thought I’d see the day

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I never thought I’d see the day,

You got so big and walked away,

Your move from being a boy to man,

Has come so quick, I’ll soon be Nan.

I never thought you’d finish School,

Or grow so tall, and make girls drool.

I always thought you’d stay my boy,

You’d never age, and stay real coy.

I never thought you’d smoke a fag,

Or swear or curse or drink or shag.

Or shower, bath for hours on end,

It’s far too hard to comprehend.

So how time flies, and soon we see,

that life goes by too quickly.

My precious boy that’s now a man,

Is leaving home because he can.

I never thought I’d say goodbye,

or wave you off and start to cry.

But now I know the time has come,

To cut the apron strings called mum.

I never thought I’d write this rhyme,

But now I know it’s the right time,

To wish you love, to wish you luck,

This is the start of your life book.

Comments

I have a 33 year old son, married & now I'm "Nan" to two lovely grandchildren. I loved your poem, full of affection, & humour, & although on the one hand it is sad to see our sons & daughters leave home, on the other it is great to see them move into adulthood & start their own independent lives. As the Lebanese poet, Khalil Gibran says in his piece about Children: "You are the bows from which your children as living arrows are sent forth.

The archer sees the mark upon the path of the infinite, and He bends you with His might that His arrows may go swift and far."

I agree with Susan above re last two lines, especially that the last line of the poem is weak.

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19/11/2014

Really nice poem, mirrors my own sentiments of watching the helpless babes we brought home from the hospital, grow into adults.

Thank you and well done.

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Imran Rafiq
13/11/2014

Can totally identify with this, having three sons. Take heart - they come back!

Nice poem, just let down slightly by the last two lines not keeping up the rhyming pattern of the previous verses.

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