To get my work and those of other writers out and onto the shelves, I have created my own publishing company. Two authors have put their faith in me so far - Sue O'Connell and Dirk Ovenstone. Dirk's ebook will be ready for distribution on 31st October with his pBooks being prepared for promotion soon after. Sue's will be ready for the New Year.
Personally, I've written three non-fiction books (psychotherapy) and two fiction books (history/romance) so far, with many more on the way.
Is this the WRVS...today?
It is immediate and engaging. I picture is as a mini-play...a sort of Talking Heads. Maybe it's because the structure is visually a little confusing. There is the odd typo still (isn't there always?) eg 'Gurkha's' doesn't need the apostrophe.
I think the theme has got 'legs'.
The narrator's voice is quite retro, almost Woosterish in places, 'rather' - 'off you pop' a tone sometimes at odds with the swear words (no, don't mind them at all, though I would happily 'pass' on the 'seminal fluid' :))
But this is recognisably the modern army too, black labrador and all, according to my limited understanding of it. My husband was an army officer when I met him, but his army days are long behind him now.
'No stripes, no pips, no manners.' I like the clean concision of that. To perfect the logic of this neat image - the ranking moving downstairs as it were, might it be no pips, no stripes, no manners.
Your writing has a high likeability. Without more, it's hard to know if you're building to a crisis that's still humorous but challengingly topical or not. Best of luck with it.
I like it! I'd have liked a short explanation of who and what you are and how you came to be attached to the army and exactly what your role is. Volunteer welfare worker? Civilian administrator?
I take it btw that if not directly autobiographical this is based on personal experience. Like James Herriot or Gervase Phinn - they were a vet and a school inspector respectively but wrote from a fictionalised point of view.
I didn't notice any particularly offensive vocabulary, but I have a daughter who was an army officer so I am used to a certain amount of profanity! The dialogue seemed about right for the characters in your story.
A glossary of army slang might be useful. Not just AGAI but other expressions that aren't immediately obvious to non-military persons.
All the best
Mary
Debbie, many thanks for that wonderfully constructive (and flattering) comment.
I have posted the blog on http://angelwithabullet.blog.co.uk/ if you want to read more.
Am about to attempt to find an agent for this work. Your comments have boosted my determination!
Thank you.
Kaye