Any one got any tips on character development..... ive just wrote the following paragraph for a new short story.. how can i make her more descriptive and still make it flow as well?
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I was rudely awoken by the loud humming of my phone alarm. It was six thirty am and I had to get ready for work. I slowly peeled my head off the pillow, took a deep anticipated yawn, and turned over to face my soul mate Jack who was still asleep next to me.
I ran my long neatly polished finger nails through his silky mousy hair, burrowing my head into his smooth bare chest; inhaling deeply to catch his aroma.
“Morning sweet heart I whispered”, nuzzling at Jacks ear, “I’ve Got to get up now and go to work…I’ll see you tonight about six thirty for dinner” I whispered.
I slowly unwrapped myself from the sheets that entangled our bodies and gently crept out of bed, leaving Jack to sleep a little longer.
He simply was the most perfect person I had ever met in my entire life, perfection in every possible way, an angel, and my soul mate. What would I do without him? I contemplated sadly.
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I don't think you need to pad your characters too much. Actions provide great characterisaton, and using your extract I can already picture your character rising and looking down on her partner. If you padded this any more it might become a case of adding words for the sake of it.
I liked it very much. :)
thanks ashish...;)