You have completed your manuscript and you have made the big decision to look for an agent. Make sure your query letter makes the right impression. This was my query letter would you say it was strong?
Dear (DON'T FORGET THE NAME)
I am seeking representation for my debut novel, YOUR BOOK TITLE, a mysterious fantasy aimed at readers age 9-12. I have chosen your agency because (DO SOME RESEARCH ON THEM) The manuscript consists of (HOW MANY WORDS) Full edit by (USE THE NAME OF YOUR EDITOR IF YOU HAD ONE)
(YOU’RE LOG-LINE)
After emerging from a life of secrecy to raise a family, Mr and Mrs Jones are shocked back into action buy a memory potion. But when they are reminded of their evil nemesis, there is only one person from their true world who can save them… their son!
(ABOUT YOU DON’T LIE)
I started writing as a press officer for an art gallery in 2010. My first press release was for the Beetles’ photographer Bill Zygmant. I held the post for one year before moving on to concentrate on my own business. I currently write reports to submit to my clients for court cases pending in my day-to-day employment.
(THE NICE BIT)
Thank you for taking the time to consider representing my work. I look forward to hearing from you.
Sincerely,
(YOU’RE NAME)
I was told by an agent that my Q letter was very strong….. How strong is yours?
Damien, it's good of you to post an example, especially as an agent said it was strong.
My covering letter is about half a page. I'm pleased to learn it's similar to yours, except I haven't added any personal details.