Can I have your opinions on how to end this chapter please?
1. "My mother's eyes were still open. But her chest was no longer moving and the fingers on her right hand were poised as though waiting for someone to take her hand."
OR
2. "My mother's eyes were still open. But her chest was no longer moving and the finger on her right hand were poised as though waiting for someone to take her hand. As the doctor would later put it "That was that for Claudia Solus,"
Thanks :)
If I were readng the book I would prefer to read the 2nd, but that's my own personal choice. It sounds better and ends it less abruptly