Just give it to me straight..... Would you send this out to an agent ?
Dear (Name)
I am seeking representation for a children’s fiction book entitled Jacob Jones & the order of seven: Chosen to save the modern world he is yet to learn about. The manuscript consists of 74,000 words. Full edit by author Jamie Richards. I am an animal behaviourist with a degree in psychology.
It's an ordinary Friday afternoon at the end of an ordinary school day when Jacob Jones travels home on the school bus with his good friend Ethan and his best friend Erica both of whom seem to be more excited about the forthcoming 'special' weekend than he is.
Campion Hills, where they all live is a quiet, charming village where nothing much changes except the weather and nothing much bothers them apart from the strange old lady at number 1 who watches them arrive back from school every day from her first floor bedroom window.
At home, Jacob has two loving parents and one highly irritating older sister, Lilly. He settles down in his very tidy room and considers new ways of irritating Lilly. He also contemplates the impending arrival of a day he has been doing his best not to get too excited about, his twelfth birthday. What he doesn't know is that the arrival of this important anniversary has also been carefully anticipated by people he has never even met. His young life is already in danger.
The day before his birthday Jacob notices some odd and unusual things: Animals are behaving strangely, the weather is gradually turning moodier and for some unexplained reason all the mirrors in his and in Erica's house have disappeared.
In the very early hours of Jacob's birthday, the evil begins. Ethan is found murdered in the street and the old lady is somehow involved. She reveals herself to the Jones' family and reminds Jacob's parents of the reason for this turmoil and the danger they are now all in. Jacob still doesn't know it but these circumstances will change his life forever and throw him, his family and his friends into a tumbling drum of tragedy, adversity and adventure. It will set into motion a succession of events that will affect not only his world but another; adjacent, world that as yet he knows nothing about.
The old lady escapes them through a mirror in her home to a safe house where explanations begin. Jacob learns that not only are his parents in denial of their former participation in the other world but also that the old lady is far stranger and far more powerful than he could ever have anticipated. He also discovers that he is one of the chosen 'Seven' and that he possesses a special power he has yet to detect. The old lady reveals it is now imperative that he travels to this other world.
On a train full of lost souls where only children can survive Jacob, Erica and Lilly begin their journey to the other world. They face obstacles and danger before locating a castle community protected by high walls and strange, undiscovered creatures. Inside they encounter an almost magical world of contradictions and differences. For all its magic, however Jacob discovers this is a vulnerable world, a world that has been waiting for him to arrive, a world that looks to him for its very survival.
The leader, Malakiah, explains Jacob's quest to him. He must return to his world and find the hidden Book of Order. The book that lists the identities of the other six who have been chosen to govern their world for the next seven years and whose lives are all now in danger. Malakiah explains that this will be no magical mystery tour; this will be a dangerous and secret journey where they will come up against the existing rogue order who for 21 years have refused to relinquish their power. A power that they will do anything to protect. Can Jacob succeed where all others have failed?
I started writing as a press officer for an art gallery in 2010. My first press release was for the Beetles' photographer Bill Zygmant. I held the post for one year before moving on to concentrate on my own business as a psychologist. I currently write reports to submit to my clients for court cases pending in my day-to-day employment.
Thank you for taking the time to consider representing my work. I look forward to hearing from you.
Sincerely,
Damien Isaak
Everyone this is why I did what I did. I found this on this website under (Listings) Read the bottom please......
I am seeking representation for a non-fiction book entitled The Night Attila Died: Solving an Ancient Murder Mystery. I am a college professor with a PhD in medieval languages and literature from the University of Minnesota and a MFA in Creative Writing from the University of North Carolina. [1]
Historians tell us that Attila the Hun died on his wedding night in 453 AD. Drunk and flat on his back, he died of natural causes – an internal haemorrhage. The only problem with this account (and it’s a big one) is that it’s a complete fabrication. The Night Attila Died challenges 1,500 years of history by presenting evidence that Attila was murdered and that the truth was covered up in the official imperial records. [2]
The events and characters are among the most interesting that history has ever assembled on one stage. There’s Aetius, the ruthless Roman general and boyhood friend of Attila who defeated the Hun in a decisive battle in Gaul. There’s the weak and stupid emperor, Valentinian III, who pulled a dagger from his robe and assassinated Aetius in a jealous rage. There’s the emperor’s older sister, Honoria, who secretly plotted to wrest power from her brother and managed to start a world war in the process. [3]
In the eastern Empire, the characters are just as colourful: Emperor Theodosius II, a weak ruler who bungled the first assassination plot against Attila, and Emperor Marcian, whom I accuse of masterminding the plot that finally destroyed the Empire’s greatest enemy. Throw in, for good measure, a scheming eunuch and a pathetic little dwarf named Zerko. It’s a great set of characters. [4]
But what the book is really about is philology. The textual science pioneered two centuries ago by the Brothers Grimm is the tool that lets us peel away layers of conspiracy and propaganda. Through the philological method we can reconstruct what really happened and how the conspiracy to kill Attila was covered up as official history. Chapter by chapter the reader participates in the detective work. In the end the threads of an ancient conspiracy are revealed and the verdict of history is overturned. [5]
There’s more at stake than just a good detective story. This is ultimately about what happens when two cultures with irreconcilable worldviews collide. It’s how we confront the Other with all the power of the sword and pen. What emerges from these violent confrontations is a skewed understanding of the past. We may call it history, but it’s often just propaganda. The Night Attila Died is rooted in the historical moment of the late Roman Empire, but the conclusions I draw are deeply connected to our own time. [6]
My publications to date are academic, in particular a book on the literary representations of Attila. I am uniquely qualified to write The Night Attila Died, having spent 15 years studying the historical and literary records as preserved in Latin, Greek, Old Church Slavonic, Old Icelandic, Old French, and Middle High German. (But that isn’t keeping me from writing a lively narrative!) I am recognised as an expert in this field and have consulted for a History Channel documentary on “famous deaths”. As an enthusiastic and dynamic speaker who speaks widely at conferences, I intend to promote the book aggressively. [7]
May I send you a full proposal with a sample chapter? [8]
This letter was sent out by e-mail (I decided to focus only on those agents who accepted e-mail enquiries). Of the ten, I heard back from nine and all nine wanted to see the full proposal. Of these nine I had three agents who were interested in representing the project and one, in particular, who pursued it aggressively. This agent called me up and expressed such enthusiasm for the concept and my writing style, that I felt he was the natural choice. Even though there were better known agents who were interested in the project, I opted for the lesser known agent on the theory that he was highly motivated to sell my book. The book sold in less than a month. There were three editors who were interested in making an offer on the book; in the end it came down to two and the higher bid won out. As a side note, the book sold on the strength of the formal proposal and a single sample chapter. The book was sold in December 2003 and submitted in final form to my editor in July 2004. It was published in July 2005 by Berkley Books.’
Adrian and Elizabeth thanks for the input much appreciated as always
Regards
Damien :)
David the butcher, "Oops pet hate sorry David the butcher" I've achieved pet hate status! ;-)
Not at all. I put your name as DaviE NOT David that's my pet hate when you get the name wrong.
I get what your saying about J.K Rowling.. Harry Potter and the - Jacob Jones and the. but the story is about a boy called Jacob and a book of order he has to find. (give me an example)
Even if he/she has heard of him - how do you know that he/she doesn't loath Jamie Richard's work? This is the risk.
(Yes you are right, did not think of that. I thought if they could see that a published author had been involved at the end it might be worth a read)
Please copy the letter rip bits out and bounce it back as this site is about helping one and other at the end of the day....
As you can tell I am not longer in the WPB
Regards
Damien the corpse..