First Sentance

by Lily Dooner
26th April 2012

The first sentance of a book is the most important. Well recently I was horrified to learn that mine was 'clunky'. Does anyone have any ideas on how to (pardon the phrase) 'declunkify' my work? I want to make sure my first sentance flows, its something I've always had trouble with? Can anyone give me any pointers?

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'Hale knew, before he had been in Brighton three hours, that they meant to murder him'.

Graham Greene - Brighton Rock.

Many authors have took their inspiration from Greene's dramatic opening line.

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'Hale knew, before he had been in Brighton three hours, that they meant to murder him'.

Graham Greene - Brighton Rock.

Many authors have took their inspiration from Greene's dramatic opening line.

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Hey Lily,

Thanks for asking such a good question. Seems to have gotten people thinking.

I too agree wholeheartedly with everything Phil mentions above. Victoria's experience seems very relevant, it shows that even though a book may begin witha pared down, to the point opening line, that succinctness belies the effort that has gone into it.

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