I am writing the first chapter of a potential novel.
Unfortunately it seems most awfully finished, but quite short still. I will of course go back and touch up on it. But it is only 2 pages and 3 lines long. How does one extend their writing?
I am writing the first chapter of a potential novel.
Unfortunately it seems most awfully finished, but quite short still. I will of course go back and touch up on it. But it is only 2 pages and 3 lines long. How does one extend their writing?
Andrew come on.. what's up with you? I don't like it ..... I Love it. You have done a great job.
Laura is right. Add some character descriptions of the mum and dad, not to much. Just so we know a bit more about them.
Please keep going. When you have a voice like this it would be a shame if you stopped writing. I for one would be happy to read more of your work.... Well done
Regards
Damien
Thanks.
It isn't apparent in this chapter, but will obviously become apparent later - but it's hard for me to act as not only a female, but certain aspects are no where near how I would act myself.
I did enjoy writing this, but I have a habit to over think things and ruin them, so I'm glad you've stopped me here. And yeah I noticed that earlier, but I may experiment with introducing how they look, or I may describe the atmosphere a bit better - then describe them in the next chapter where there is a lot less happening.
But thanks!
Andrew
Andrew, I really don't think you need to worry! This has me gripped. Perfect length. If you are trying to expand then maybe some character descriptions of the mum and dad e.g height, hair colour, clothes they are wearing etc would add some more words and give the audience a little more to work with but it's pretty damn good so far!
Really love this piece!