First Sentance

by Lily Dooner
26th April 2012

The first sentance of a book is the most important. Well recently I was horrified to learn that mine was 'clunky'. Does anyone have any ideas on how to (pardon the phrase) 'declunkify' my work? I want to make sure my first sentance flows, its something I've always had trouble with? Can anyone give me any pointers?

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Ideally, the first sentence should grab the reader's attention and provide a hint at what the story might bring. The length of the sentence depends on the amount of information necessary to alert the reader that a great story is about to unfold. A good example is Edgar Allan Poe's opening sentence of The Fall of the House of Usher:

'During the whole of a dull, dark and soundless day in the autumn of the year, when the clouds hung oppressively low in the heavens, I had been passing alone, on horseback, through a singularly dreary tract of country; and at length found myself, as the shades of evening drew on, within view of the melancholy House of Usher.'

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Peter Scottney-Turbill
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There's this very famous one, 'The past is a foreign country, they do things differently there.'

The Go-Between, L.P. Hartley.

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'Hale knew, before he had been in Brighton three hours, that they meant to murder him'.

Graham Greene - Brighton Rock.

Many authors have took their inspiration from Greene's dramatic opening line.

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