Prologue 1 or 2

by Clare Williams
4th January 2017

Hi everyone

I've currently editing my MS and have had very mixed feedback about the prologue. The consensus seems to be that it should stay in, but I have 2 versions and the feedback on both of them has been quite conflicting - I appreciate people have different pov's. But as of yet no-one has really been able to compare the two together, as only one is ever on the MS at one time - obviously.

So I'd thought I'd ask the lovely people here at W&A what you think.

It's been suggested that the first one may make the protagonist seem a bit too ruthless. And the second one people seemed to love or hate. The gripe being that it gives the game away too soon - it doesn't though, but readers wouldn't know that.

I'd really appreciate any thoughts if people have the time, or inclination to have a look. It's on my shared work. And each prologue is just a couple of hundred words each.

Thanks in advance.

Clare

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Personally, and it is entirely personal, I prefer the Gina prologue. The old ' this is how I die oh wait no it isn't' twist ( if that's what your going for) has become a bit of a movie cliche and so it reads a bit like a screenplay to me. It's a perfectly good twist but the Gina prologue is more subtle. Like Jimmy said, it's hard to judge in isolation.

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Just out of curiosity, did you find prologue 1 made the protagonist seem ruthless Penny? I didn't but someone pointed out to me that it did - which was partly the reason for going back to prologue 2 - which was the original prologue! It's all every confusing! :)

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Thankyou Penny.

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