Hi everyone
I've currently editing my MS and have had very mixed feedback about the prologue. The consensus seems to be that it should stay in, but I have 2 versions and the feedback on both of them has been quite conflicting - I appreciate people have different pov's. But as of yet no-one has really been able to compare the two together, as only one is ever on the MS at one time - obviously.
So I'd thought I'd ask the lovely people here at W&A what you think.
It's been suggested that the first one may make the protagonist seem a bit too ruthless. And the second one people seemed to love or hate. The gripe being that it gives the game away too soon - it doesn't though, but readers wouldn't know that.
I'd really appreciate any thoughts if people have the time, or inclination to have a look. It's on my shared work. And each prologue is just a couple of hundred words each.
Thanks in advance.
Clare
Personally, and it is entirely personal, I prefer the Gina prologue. The old ' this is how I die oh wait no it isn't' twist ( if that's what your going for) has become a bit of a movie cliche and so it reads a bit like a screenplay to me. It's a perfectly good twist but the Gina prologue is more subtle. Like Jimmy said, it's hard to judge in isolation.
Just out of curiosity, did you find prologue 1 made the protagonist seem ruthless Penny? I didn't but someone pointed out to me that it did - which was partly the reason for going back to prologue 2 - which was the original prologue! It's all every confusing! :)
Thankyou Penny.